Her soulmate waits for “high school days”
and juggles his mind’s song
while she tends her heart’s fire
with standard oil
until that blessed moment
when he pitches forwards
(and clicks)
hors de fosse
into this void
(One of these days)
Life is short, so let’s be decent.
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53 replies on “One of these days”
Beautiful text 🙂
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Thanks! This one came out spontaneously, one evening, while I was painting. I was warmed by the reception from readers.
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The best ideas come to our mind when we’re not looking for them.
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I agree. I wish a bestselling novel would come tumbling out of my brain. I hope the same for you on your ongoing chapters. xo
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So I want to be your first fan and reader:)
I have a long road in front of me…
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You’ll make it, Amir. Believe in your special gift and you’ll enjoy every moment of that road trip. x
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You are a good & kind friend SB. I like you
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Oh I am honored. I was able to change my main site in the account settings. Thank you for mentioning that. Cheers to more literary pieces! I love your work!👍
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Thank you for your exhuberant support and this, coming from someone with your remarkable talent, keeps my hope alive that I will be able to do more. x
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The written word is such a good therapy for the soul. It is only after being sick for awhile and after my divorce that I started to write again. The web has so much to offer and sites like WordPress is our gateway to sharing our work no matter how novice one is. Thank you for your support too!
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I’m very happy to have met you. x
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Same here! Take care!
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Sabiscuit, oh my, I can relate to this poem, received a confession of unrequited love of 25 years…that blew me away
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Thank you so much, Elsbeth. That was my concern when writing this: Would anyone understand what I meant? And I am encouraged by your response. By the way, the blog linked to your Gravatar hasn’t been updated in about a year. Is there a different one I should be looking at? Thank you again for your warm response.
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Hello, opppss my bad, I have 3 sites, but I am currently active at http://www.elsbethconlu.wordpress.com, I don’t know how to update my gravatar. I am still learning the ropes here in WordPress.
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Thank you very much. I’ll add this new site to my reader. x
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Hi SB, I hope you’re well?, I hope you don’t mind but I’d like to nominate you to answer a few questions on your reading habits, if you’re interested you can find it at https://wanag1yata.wordpress.com/2015/07/28/reading-habits/
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I responded at your blog. Thank you. x
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🙂 ❤
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[…] One of these days by Sabiscuit – A beautiful poem by my friend Sabiscuit – as usual she has a wonderful way of expressing thoughts, a way I never would think of, and a way that always makes me smile. But what I really love about this creation is how she includes her actual handwritten version of the poem, as in ink on paper. She has an illustration and highlights some phrases as well. I have always loved handwriting, perhaps because I always wished mine were just a little bit more like the way I envisioned it should be. The physical lines, varying widths, decisions about spacing of the letters, how many words go on a line, how to indent each line, whether to drop some letters down below the line or not – all these things are small representations and reflections of the author. And I’m not speaking in terms of psycho-analysis, to somehow determine that a person takes wild risks or resents their mother based on how you write your lowercase “i”‘s. It’s simply another connection point with the author – like when you see Beethoven’s handwritten original compositions with his annotations, or when I read the flight log of my grandfather from the 1940’s when he was training in the Navy. I love that Sabiscuit shared this part of herself along with her – or, more correctly, as part of – her composition. It challenges me to see how I could do something similar. […]
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Mattheeeeeew…. Thank you so much for the pingback. I’m glad you liked it and thank you so much again for being an awesome blogging bestie.
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He stumbled a bit and fell into the pit. Be careful with that axe Eugene 😀
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I’m hoping he does. It’ll be a happy bonus.
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Instead of a pit, dig a moat all the way around, no chance for error 😀
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Unless a greedy girl grabs him first. Then my moat had better be filled with my favourite curry, as I might need to eat my blues away. x
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Well, the moat should keep them out. Don’t forget the secret tunnel to the bit in the middle. I cannot stress enough how important that is, especially if you fill your moat with man eating sharks..
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I love sharks, so thank you for the reminder and the suggestions. I’ll add some steel crosses, too, to ward off glampires. x
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Lots of garlic too…
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This is wonderful, and I love how you have written and drawn it on paper. It makes the poem come to life even more, to see a physical representation of what you created.
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Thank you so much, Matt. I am normally perturbed by my own handwriting but was surprised that I finally could make out words, after all these years.
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I think it’s wonderful. I think handwriting is so interesting.
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Lovely!
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Thank you so much!
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Terrific.
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Thank you, SOBeach. x
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You’re more than welcome. Gotta go though, emmagc just posted something that hit me like a brick. I’ll be back though
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I hope you’re feeling better after taking that walk. Triggers are rough. After bawling for two whole days a few weeks ago, I feel for anyone who has to go through that. (Hugs) x
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I’m fine. Just hit me how accurate that was. It appears she took it down. I hope that wasnt due to my reaction or something. It was a great article.
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Please let her know. I sometimes remove things after they’ve made the impact I wanted but Ems is a lovely person and I’m sure she felt she didn’t want to cause you any pain on purpose. No one does. If you see a trigger in anything I post, please tell me, okay?
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I hope I didn’t make her feel bad in any way. I know she couldn’t have possibly predicted that. Hell I didn’t see it coming either. It was a great article. I hope she reposts it. I got more out that than in 3months of therapy….and I loved my therapist.
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That is awesome. Writing can be healing. I’m glad you feel better, at least. x
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I sent her a message on another post. Haven’t seen a response yet. Wish I hadn’t said anything now. Hope I didn’t make her feel bad, at all. Last thing I meant to do if that’s the case
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Your feelings are real to you and I’m glad you felt comfortable expressing them openly. I think the way you did it was insightful. If you were helped by her, even if the first rush of it was a bit overwhelming, it’s all good as you’re a newer version of you, right now.
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Well, I just created a post apologizing. Hope she sees it. I feel really bad about it. Should’ve just kept my mouth shut. Didnt need to lay that on her.
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Please don’t start with that. You didn’t do anything wrong, okay?
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Thank you. Have I told you lately that you rock? If not….you rock!
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Thank you for making my day, even though I was trying to help you through yours. Your compliment has been great therapy. Thank you.
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Well, I need a kick in the ass sometimes. Thanks for providing the boot!!! Glad I know you, as much as one can know an anonymous Internet poster. And, yes, you’re awesome!
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I liked it too.
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Thank you so much. This has been tremendous. x
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Very welcome my friend.
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Very nice!
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Thank you so much!
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